Monday, January 28, 2013

An Excerpt From A Story That I Am Working on That Will NOT Be Posted On Blogger

Here is a copy of the whole entire first page of a brand new story that I am working on.  This story does not yet have a title and it is a story that I will not continue to feature on Blogger (or any other website).  It is a story that I am planning on making into an actual book, unlike "Mesmerized" (actually I haven't yet decided rather or not I'm going to try and publish "Mesmerized" into a real book), and I am only going to share with you all the full first page, because I want some suggestions, comments, and feedback!  Please tell me what you all think.  Ok, here goes...

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“A woman has a voice. A woman deserves to have a voice. A woman should be allowed to talk, sing, and shout with her beautiful voice all she wants, but she shouldn't be demanded or forced to do so. A woman's voice is there to be heard. A woman should be heard, not herded like donkeys, sheep, or cattle, but listened to.

I am really not trying to sound sexist here. I am a feminist and care deeply about my fellow women and their rights, as well as those of my own.

“I also care about men and their rights as well (but sometimes I just have problems with them and they just really bug the shit out of me). Well, sometimes both men and women bug the shit out of me, but one thing that I have observed over the few years I have been alive and roaming this Earth (and through reading textbooks and crap on the matter) is that this world is very sexist and biased towards women, and sadly, actually has been for many, many years. Will it ever not be? And why is it? Why has it been? Who the hell knows?!

“My name is Jezebel Desdemona. Yes, I know what you all must be thinking... “Haha, your name means 'Unexalted, uninspired, dull.' And isn't it the typical name for a slut or girl who works in a brothel? And that last name? It means 'of the devil'? Come on. Really?” Yeah, I know... I get it all the time! But, contrary to my name, I am actually very inspired (well, sometimes)! I think that it was my parents who were 'uninspired' when they chose my name. And, um, no, I am not a slut, hooker, or person who works at a brothel. Seriously! The name 'Jezebel' is like so over done!

Well, anyways, I am here today to tell you my story and to 'go back in time,' so to speak, and take a trip down memory lane and share with you all my past experiences, all the events leading me up to where I am now, and my inspirations, triumphs, and extemporaneous, impromptu-esque thoughts and actions of spontaneity and insanity.

“My tale, in its entirety or in parts, is not an easy one to stomach or process correctly in one's intellectual ideological thought capacitor. I would proceed with caution if I were you, if you are going to go on chatting with me and listening to what I have to say, because I am going to tell you all of it, even the gruesome, insane, and completely disgusting parts. I am going to do my best to not leave out a single event or detail of utmost importance. And I am warning you... This tale has a few extremely gross, foul, and bitter parts, and I do not have a filter for my nuncupative inklings, nor for my internal contemplations.”

“I still want to hear it.”

“Ok, if you insist!”

“Of course I do. You are quite an interesting person and there is just so much about you that I am dying to know!”

“Alright... I warned you! But you insisted...”

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So...  What do you think of it?  Please let me know!  Thanks for reading...


-Bridgette <3




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